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Thanks for the tips, I'll be sure to capitalize. As for the metaphors and whatnot, I kept this poem bland for a reason. I understand how I could make it ...

Ohhhh! Now I get it! Clever... haha. :]

Oh, and also.. "The ocean is for those who made the right decisions Now they can rest and become one with the ocean" you said ocean twice. it sounds awkward ...

well, this is uhm well something. hahaha. i liked it, despite the fact i'm a girl. it's pretty gnar. :] i like it, a lot. it's pretty twisted.. haha.

I really liked this, and it has meaning to it, unlike some lyrics that I've seen. I actually sang this out loud, and it sounded good. haha. I love to ...