midnightsky

I absolutely LOVE the idea of your poem, however at some point, the main idea of the poem becomes a little confusing... It starts off great but as it unravels ...

Loved the lyrics, great job!!! Continue creating songs, but next time add a little more rhythm and rhyme, which will make your Chorus a lot more interesting to read... Chorus ...

Immensely touching, however their are some grammar mistakes, and it takes a while to actually understand the concept of the text. Great idea though! Not to mention the fact that ...

I absolutely LOVE the concept of the story, however there are some slight mistakes and things that you can improve mildly to create a more tense and nerving environment. Some ...

Extremely touching, truly amazing the emotions are very visible, but I have to admit some of the metaphors are quite peculiar, like a vegetable being chopped....? Otherwise great job! :D ...

This is a great story! Next time instead of having that one piece as one entire chapter, it should be two instead and then you won't have as much detail ...

Really good, no mistakes at all! Next time give a description of the room or the area around the character, for the reader to imagine everything to its fullest extent... ...