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Hey, I'm sorry this has taken me an eternity to review. I have some free time this weekend. :) I'm sorry if this is too harsh. I'm just going to ...

‘I can’t come right now Father,’ *A comma needs to be before Father. Even when you don't use the character's actual name you still need a comma when addressing them. ...

Hey Thorn, You have some great description here. It makes reading very entertaining. I'm afraid I'm a cut and dry kind of person so I'm going to get on to ...

Hey ractavia, Fantastic morale. You can never go wrong with 'everyone is beautiful.' This was a very nice way to express that. At first I thought the characters were a ...

Hey, You seem kind of new, so I'm going to say "Welcome" even if you've been here a few months. First, a lot of people on this site won't even ...

Hi, First of all, I respect your mother's fight for life and sincerely hope that she recovered and has stayed healthy. The fact that this is a true story makes ...

Hey, It's good to see some new work of yours. This is cool and exciting. Some of the sentences aren't as thought out as others, but that will come as ...

Hey, I think I was just meant to review this because yesterday I was about to review it, but had something to do. Today it popped up again, so... Yay! ...

Hey, I don't know much about X-Men, so I'm going to approach this as though it was regular fiction. Maybe I'll help, maybe not. We'll see. "I am a Spaniard ...

Hey, I'm going to tell you what I think of the work as a whole after I get my nitpicks out of the way. So... I suppose I should just ...

Hey, Tomboy Welcome to YWS. I hope you get as much out of this as I have over the months. I'm just gonna dive in a tell you what I ...

Hey, Your summary made this sound interesting, so I'm going to take a crack at this. You've got a pretty cool idea here. Regardless, I hope he’s glad to see ...

I am so sorry. Our laptop got stolen in the airport, so I had no computer, and... I haven't gotten back in the swing of YWS, honestly. Anyway, it looks ...

Hey, I haven't read the other chapters, but this was interesting and not so confusing that I wanted to quit before I reached the end. I'm going to go ahead ...

The sound of heels clicking on the kitchen floor woke me from the light doze I’d fallen into. I guess a doze isn't a very heavy sleep, now that I ...