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The language is very interesting, and I like the truthfull structure a lot.

Very interesting use of rhyme, but restricting. If you were able to get what you wanted across, then great!

Psudiname- Thanks for the review! That helps a lot. I'm thinking of re-doing this one because it isn't as good as it can be. Thanks again for your help!

Beautiful poem. I'm sorry for your loss, it is obvious he was important to you.

Very breathy, very airy. I like it.

I like your emotional style of writing; it is very nice, neat and tidy with no fluff to fill it in. It sounds honest, and I like the structure- the ...

This is very unique, and a great story. Maybe go over the wording to make sure it says what you want it to say, because some of the language doesn't ...

The imagery of a 'soft silk noose' is impressive. It really causes the reader to keep reading and get into it.

Wow. I really hope you continue this- I am looking forward to reading more. You obviously know how to write very well, and have a good imagination.

I really like this- I want to keep reading! I think this will go far. Keep it up!

The imagery is great. I like the confusing structure of the dreams, and how it changes from dream to dream to reality. Nice work.

The imagery is great, but I think you should review and edit the poem and make sure it is really what you are trying to say before posting it. Also, ...

You have a good basic idea down, but maybe you could try writing out what is going to happen in general, and then filling in the blanks before writing the ...

I really like the imagry, and the structure was very interesting. It was a complete success because you took readers to a place where they could understand what you were ...

This is very well writen; the writing style is very clean, and it is a smooth poem to recite. I loved the structure and the story behind it.