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Rhythm feels... rather odd to me in the earlier parts with longer verses, but please don't take offence in that. I'm only an amateur in such things anyway. Nonetheless, this ...

Amazing Grace? Good job there. I would suggest using the spellcheck YWS provides to double-check your spelling as there are a few mistakes ('falt' should be 'fault', and 'tuats' should ...

I cannot say that I am familiar with the Bolera, but this poem is quite absorbing. It describes the dance quite clearly and I can feel it. However, there are ...

Girl abused by father, father drunkard, mother dead, likes handsome guy at school, a normal girl. Pretty much a summary of this (A rather poor one, as I'm sure you'd ...

Fascinating. This brings many thoughts to mind. It's the Man in the Mirror that does so. I presume this is a poem concerning one's reflection in a mirror? And why ...

Ah. Fascinating. A brief look at the quintessential American prom I believe, asking why do the girls do so? This poem is rather short, but I have enjoyed it, mainly ...

Intriguing. It reminds me of 'Beastly', a novel I read sometime ago. Both have a similar theme, that is, of a witch scorned by a 'handsome' male and therefore cursed ...

I was rather... disappointed in the lack of subtle insanity, but still this is interesting, even though I've encountered a few pieces that follow that same idea, that they were ...

Confusing. Though I would say that it was your intention. Nonetheless, it is fascinating to read such a piece. I rather enjoyed the morbidity of this piece, the many references ...

Good descriptions. I particularly liked this part. He found Jacqui in the garden. She was cutting roses again, watching the petals drift slowly onto her lap, scarlet like blood. The ...

I like this story. Even though I cannot detect anything resembling a storyline (Which this piece might not even require, as it may be a depiction of a boy's life) ...