markdlor

The plot develops very quickly. That is good, normally. When you have so much of it, however, it is easy for any reader (my very self included) to properly comprehend ...

The format works fine, don't worry about that. What you could improve is the pacing. Keeping the vocabulary simple is good, it fits the tone of the piece. However, if ...

Honestly, this is one of the most beautiful works I have read in some time. The sorrow and the solemn beauty collide gracefully to create one of the deepest emotional ...

True, this follows general cliche in it's subject manner, but that's OK, inventing a whole new story, new aspect of life is difficult for even accomplished authors. So keep to ...

The story develops rather quickly, without much explanation and handwaving the past events. Although there will probably be references to the past events later on in the story, a little ...