mantisrox

Some spelling errors, and a ship.... Other than that, most excellent!

Yeah, I didn't really think of how long it was. From now on, i'll do one chapter at a time. In other writing tools, it looks a lot shorter :P

It was good, very deep as well. Very open to discussion. That is good in a poem. Overall, I like it! :)

The actual writing was good, but the story lacked structure, and something to hook you. It could have played out the thing about dating the ex, or about becoming good ...