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Re: Dream Catcher Chapters #1 and #2
GoOsE BuMpS AGAIN!! :D :D :D Does the guy ever wake up? I mean is he dreaming throughout the entire story? Don't get me wrong, I love the way you're ...
May 26, 2008 -
Re: Before I go to sleep
A little plump, but not to fat. Right here when you say "but not to fat" "to" should be "too" And spend all day in my pyjamas. Pyjamas should be ...
May 23, 2008 -
Re: Dead Inside
Without pausing the breathe, Change "the breathe" to "to breathe" Other than that, I couldn't find anymore mistakes. :wink: Anyway, I thought this story was pure awesomness!! :twisted: You so ...
May 23, 2008 -
Re: Dream Catcher - Prologue
Man this piece actually gave me goose bumps. Beyond all of the mistakes that Azila has pointed out, it was good. You just need to touch it up a bit ...
May 23, 2008 -
Re: Machinations #1 (part 1)
Looking out of the shattered department store window, he lit a third match and – his hands trembling violently – and touched the nodding flame to the tip of his ...
May 16, 2008 -
Re: Lake
sit and stare out to space, I'm not very good with poetry, but shouldn't this be: "sit and stare out into space," Or maybe: "sit and stare into space," I ...
May 16, 2008 -
Re: Forgotten Diety ( Chapter 2: A dip into the past)
Wow!! This was great! I loved it and I so wanna read more. I hope you do good on finals. And please, please keep on with this story!! You have ...
May 14, 2008