lulu_daisy_101 wrote:In the smmer when I go to bed
The sun still streaming overhead
My bed becomes so small and hot
With sheets and pillow in a knot,
And then I lie and try to see
The things I'd really like to be.
I think I'd be a glossy cat
A little plump, but not to fat.
I'd never touch a bird or mouse
I'm much to busy round the house.
And then a fierce and hungry hound
The king of dogs for miles around;
I'd chase the posrman just for fun
To see how quickly he could run.
Perhaps I'd be a crocodile
Within the marshes of the Nile
And paddle through the river-beds
With dripping mud-caps on my head.
Or maybe next a mountain goat
With shaggy whiskers on my throat,
Leaping streams and jumping roks
In stripey pink and purple socks.
Or else I'd be a polar bear
And on an iceberg make my lair;
I'd keep a shop in Baffin Sound
To sell icebergs by the pound.
And then I'd be a wise old frog
Squatting on a sunken log,
I'd teach the fishes lots of games
And how to read and write their names.
An Indian lion then I'd be
And lounga about on my settee;
I'd feed on nothing but bananas
And spend all day in my pyjamas.
I'd like to be a tall giraffe
Making lots of people laugh,
I'd do a tap dance in the street
with little bells upon my feet.
And then I'd be a foxy fox
Streaking through the hollyhocks,
Horse os hound would ne'er catch me
I'm master of disguise, you see.
I think I'd be a chimpanzee
With musical ability,
I'd play a silver clarinet
Or from a Monkey String Quartet.
And then a snake with scales of gold
Guarding hoards of wealth untold,
No thief would dare to steal a pin-
But friends of mine I would let in.
But then before I really know
Just what I'd be or where I go
My bed becomes so wide and deep
And all my thoughts are fast asleep.
Hey Lulu Shina here and I'm back for more.
In this first line summer has a U. You need to change pillow to pillows so it's plural. The singular form breaks the flow. Lie should be lay. You used the wrong spelling because "lie" is to not tell the truth. This poem is a lot like the other one I reviewed "before I go to bed"?
Remember not to post things twice without a notice in the title!
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