madam-butterfly

i didn't see any grammatical mistakes, so good. (that's something i'm always critiqued for (i have terribnle grammer)) grammer isn't the most important thing in a poem, it capturing feeling ...

this is really well written and the flow and rhythm is flawless. but... what the poem is actually about is hard to understand, i'm not sure i know what point ...

uh...wow. it was definitely strange but i'll say unique. lol! the mother-daughter theme is very unusual like kitty15 said, but that's what makes a story good, it's different from all ...

well, it's very unique and sensual in lieu of just sexual which i think is great, and very alluring. you should work on the rhythm and eliminate adlibs such as ...

i really enjoyed this poem, though it's common. since you can't help writing what you feel, try to bring it out in a way that no one has ever done ...