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I love your style! You are very deep and specific. The writing creates a dark image of life and allows the reader to become lost in the "sadist" mind of ...

I would have to agree with the latter statement. The two insertions would in fact increase the flow of the poem. Excellent imagery as well!

Flow of the poem is a bit confusing. I like the quotations and the story. However, it seems a bit choppy. Put the poem "together". Keep the wording and the ...