lysolstinks

i have to admit, it was not poetry at all. it seemed to be a mass of confusion. words and thoughts just didnt connect. i have read it a few ...

Definitely unique. It made me laugh while reading. And who doesnt need a good laugh. Very well written, and excellent structure. Carl

I really liked the unique subject you chose to write about. I have to admit this is the first time I have ever read a poem on Hear worm. well ...

Audy, I liked this one. The emotion was very strong, sometimes writing while in the heat of feelings turns out a very good piece of work. Carl

Sorry I know i have already posted on this, but i just read chapter 12 and it was a while between postings, so i reread it to brief up on ...

I really like your style of writing. I have only read a few of your chapters, but i will go back and find the ones i missed. This story line ...

Another great chapter. You are slowly giving away the secret. I like that, it keeps the mystery going. I really like this book. Carl

I liked reading this, it helped knowing you were young when it was written. It was cute. carl

This was ok. The last stanza didn't quite fit the flow. It stopped almost to harshly, and forced. But all in all it was good. carl

Your poem was very deep and thoughtful. It was very good. The only thing you need to do, is add puncuation, and capitlize. It made it difficult to read. Which ...

Although i normally do not read these types of poems, I did like this one. I found it very intriguing, lyslolstinks

I like how you introduced your new characters. This chapter very enteresting. lysolstinks

I have to agree with BigBadBear, other then grammar this is a very intriguing story. Just when I felt i was putting it together, You throw in another twist. I ...

this was fun to read, off the beaten path. it put a smile on my face. so it must be good.

i think you have a good story line going, but you need to break up the paragraph, it is very hard to read. lysolstinks