luna_the_shiekah

Ooooh how creepy. Ymgardiel being surrounded by beasts reminded me of "300" and how Leonidus fought that wolf in the mountains. Very interesting creature the Djinn and the description of ...

Hey guess what, I laughed. This made me laugh out loud, not that lame lol kind that you just write to let the other person know you thought what they ...

*whistles* Wow, quite the lovely piece you've got here. Perhaps I should join this Fools' Duel just to see what all the fuss is about ;) He looked around; boarded ...

Very interesting take on the story. I loved the movie and the book, it's nice to see you twist it so. She was striding across a torn battleground, strewn with ...

the woman seemed to struggle to breath I think you mean breathe yes? “I’m sure you are trying to talk, too? No talking. I’ll let you breathe, but I have ...

Interesting start. My only real bone to pick is the names of Zelda's cousin and attendant. They are too "normal." If this is set during peace time where Ganondorf isn't ...

I liked this, I'd never thought of it that way. Then again, I don't particularly think very hard on the matters of religion anyway since I'm not very religious despite ...

An interesting start. Prepare yourself! For now I shall critique it! ^_^ The loud music came to a halt. The sweet voice of the dance teacher projected out and through ...

Interesting take on drug abuse and drugs in general. I like the metaphor of the glass house. Too lazy to actually do a proper critique. But I do want to ...

GYR! This was amazing! I really liked the humorous twist you did to this :D It caught my eye because I myself am doing my own twist to Cinderella. Though ...

I liked this introduction to the story and the interesting choice in names you have for your characters. Also, the way Mehmood speaks is a nice way to differ him ...

The pale light from the sky cast the cloth in a horrible gray; even her red headscarf seemed to lack in color. I think you should remove the "in" from ...

The looking-glass, if it could be called that, had a bulky border with leaf designs and a black grille protected it from curious hands wishing to touch the smooth surface. ...

He took one long puff, then stomped it out under foot; he knew how much I hated the smell of smoke, and probably lit the cigarette solely to bother me. ...

Very simple but it contains a really good metaphor for this estranged game of Life we've got going on. I agree with everyone else that "play dough" distracts from the ...