lukas8u

The first thing you have to ask yourself when you writing something is: what am I writing this for? While writing because you're bored isn't necessarily bad, you do need ...

This is a good solid poem and is definitely interesting. I caught myself rereading some of the more subtle phrases to try and understand their meaning. The one thing you ...

The Heights- Brain James This is a remake of the classic "the wuthering heights" and while isn't as much a romance book, but more an exploration of love and hate ...

Alright! Overall nitpicks first! First off- The chapter is packed! Way too much descriptive detail. While generally that's good, it doesn't have to be all packed into one chapter. I ...

Liked it. It had a nice message, and over all simile was good. Especially the pulling the quilt apart. The only thing I would change is, repeat that slight rhyme ...

Ok- I'm sorry to break the parade, but I didn't like this. I have seen some of your original parodies, they are, frankly getting stale. You need to expand out ...

Great poem. I don't think it was over dramatizied at all, where I live, there some place's where I'm attacked just as bad because i support gay rights. On to ...

Really liked it. One little nitpick: Tom calls death an ass when he jokes about flipping a coin, but doesn't react when Death makes a joke about him dieing again. ...

Hmm.. Honestly, I have to say, this is over dramatized. I've played Halo 3, and even by that games insanely unrealistic, you managed to top this off. And I'm assuming ...

I really like this poem. I think you can keep the capitalization for the first line, I think you meant to emphasis the descriptive words, but decapitalize thunder on the ...

Hmm.. Seeing as this is a slow chapter, I think you might as well do a bit more information dumping. Also, I would make it longer, but that's not that ...

Hm... I like it, I like it a lot, and that's saying something since I normally throw up/gag when I read romantic poetry. Partly it's because it's a bit different. ...

Ok, the first thing is, is that the story is too short. Nothing major, but I would add more. Ionly have one technical nitpick When Bane awoke, the moon was ...

I reall like this Garage sale of memories Get 'em while they're cheap. The sign was old and faded, like the memories it advertised. Pretty much the only problem I ...

Great story! Few points. First of all, if you want to keep the 13 year old age, you have to explain the advanced aging immediately, other wise it's confusing. Also, ...