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Another happy review day. My, what delightful piece do you have here? This is a huge transition from the last chapter. Let's get on with the review! The walls were ...

Hi again! Happy review day! You better be reviewing! Ok, maybe not but whatever! Nitpicks Maria decided to switch on the highly upbeat Christian tune “Bail up the Converts” on ...

Wow, that was grim and sad. Well, I'm glad your mom is better now! I haven't heard of Myathenia Gravis before now. I knew that many other diseases can kill ...

Ok, so I saw this on the green room, went back to the other chapters to read, and now I'm reviewing! Nitpicks caringly “What could You need a comma after ...

Happy review day! Let's review(and welcome to YWS!) Ok, so you are a beginner writer. I shall put it bluntly, there is room to improve. I'm not being mean here, ...

Hello olafson11, welcome to YWS! How did you get all this right? I would be tired after the first paragraph. Anyone know why there has been? I'm no fan of ...

Finally you post! Ok, let's review, after I read it first of course... Read it! Since this chapter is so big, I'll be doing the nitpicks by sections. Section 1- ...

Hey there, welcome to YWS! I am here to review this review day. I have no nitpicks. The dialogue was kinda choppy. On one part, it started out with 'Am' ...

Happy review day! Let's review this sucker. The detail is such a short piece is surprising. We have the Mom, who is possibly going crazy. Then we have the son ...

Ok, this was an interesting tale. It's like an introduction to a character you are going to write about. Maybe you should write something where you show her, or his, ...

Wait, since when do you do the panda' s view on the world? Oh well, this bear is hilarious. These topics are so- what's the word? Controversial. You take the ...

How do the others not count as reviews? Never mind that. Let's review. This song is emotional and very relatable. Some want to leave the place they have been for ...

Is this a work or an idea? Never mind that. I noticed that this piece is in 2nd person, the kind that usually is used for non fiction writing. Nitpicks- ...

I remember seeing this for something. I never got around to reviewing it. Well, I'm here now! I like how it went along. First they are investigating a murder and ...

This is symbolic and different. Where did my collarbone go? Am I too fat to see them? Dear me oh my, I better stop eating! I love how you address ...