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thanks, guys. just a question to BlackNether, who would you like to know more about? I see what you're saying about just throwing names around. Do you have any pointers ...

This is a good prologue, I like the sense of mystery around it, and your imagery is wonderful. The one thing I would advise is breaking up the big paragraph ...

beckiw pretty much caught any improvements i would have suggested ;). all in all, i think this is a fantastic piece! the simplicity of it is what makes it so ...

This was really good! you had me hooked from the begining. The only thing that bugged me was the over-usage of "whatever." If you mean to over-use it though, you ...

I wrote this fairly quickly, so if anyone has any suggestions I'd be really happy to hear them :).