lilymoore

Hey ICBF…I need to think of a better nickname for you. *ponders* Anyways, overall, this is a very charming love poem. I understand that you don’t have to punctuate or ...

Hello Big Words! So, right off the bat, I had two little nitpicks. And there’s a card on my table that’s inviting me to come back, a card that marks ...

Hey ROC! So, this is a good start, but I know you can do better. :D The story idea is good, but the execution is a little off for a ...

Hi Sarebear! I’m Lily. I’m sure we haven’t met yet, but, well, now we have! :D Now, as far as this story goes, Suz made a lot of good points, ...

Hi there newbie! *hugs the newb* :D So, this is a really short piece and it’s not a lot to work with. The first thing I have to say, though, ...

Hey there UV light bulb! So, since this is a contest entry, I’ll try and be as helpful as possible! ...clear enough for a car to make its way through. ...

Aww, Beff is sixteen and must have just gotten her license, am I right? Or at least close. Because that was exactly how I felt when I got mine last ...

Aww, tell Armando that this was definitely a very sweet story. I won’t be too critical with this or anything but you have to remember that “explode” isn’t really the ...

Well, Auteur, that was just depressing. But it was also well written. The only actual problem that I have with this is that my curiosity is sparked. I can only ...

Hiya, River! So, right now, you have a very interesting idea set up. The first super human. But you tell here more than you show. And that’s a big no-no ...

E.B. White! *pounces* So, I’m really trying to understand poetry. I’m doing my best. But this is such a nice change from all those hard to interpret poems I keep ...

Hi there, Navita! I actually don’t think we’ve ever been introduced but I’m Lily! So, I’ve sat here and read this poem over and over and I’m still wondering if ...

Hello, Skorp! *shakes hands* So, I’ll say right of the bat that Kyllorac is dead on. But I understand what you’re trying to do, at least I think so. I’m ...

What d'ya think? I'm worried it's too long, naggy and repetitive. I think this is really good. I also think it was really silly of me to use quotes to ...

Hi there Hap. First off, thank you for writing a short story. I love short stories. They make me feel all tickly on the inside. *hands over a plate of ...