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Re: Elf Son-Chapter 2
Thank you for critiquing this, Treecub. However, I made a pronunciation guide, although I haven't posted it yet. His name, with the little accent mark (yes, there is a reson ...
Dec 7, 2006 -
Re: Teardrop
Zank you. Zank you. Zank you very very much. I'm changing like half of my poem. But, bubbles, I think I'm still going to keep the: oh me, oh my. ...
Dec 7, 2006 -
Re: The knife
Dont mind lillizard, I think he's been taking grumpy pills You're taking grumpy pills! =P But unfortunately losing the grammar gives your poem an amateurish feel and makes it obvious ...
Dec 7, 2006 -
Re: DRAGON
Nice job! The last stanza I thought was the strongest. A combination of nice ryhming, and rythm. However, as previously mentioned, the first stanza was not the best one to ...
Dec 4, 2006 -
Re: Elf Son
Ah, but that's what chapter 4 is four. I mean, for.
Dec 3, 2006 -
Re: Elf Son
I copied and pasted it from word perfect, meaning it showed up in this hideous, tragic form! AHHHH! I usually put a link into this after I add a new ...
Dec 3, 2006 -
Re: JUST READ IT, IT'S HARD TO EXPLAIN
This poem is awesome. Very nice metaphors, I really liked it. Also, like they said, the flow could use a boost. Just take out a couple of words here or ...
Dec 3, 2006 -
Re: Elf Son
Hello? Anyone there? I'm knocking but nobody's answering. Ah, well...
Dec 3, 2006 -
Re: Ahem.. Ahem.. Roald Dahl is here!!
Three words: best. children's. writer. I have never read a children's book that has such a good combo of wittiness, flow, and plots than Roahld Dahl. Also, I think he ...
Dec 3, 2006 -
Re: Elf Son
Thanks, guys. I'll due some major editations tonight.
Nov 30, 2006 -
Re: Elf Son
oops... Sorry, didn't meen to double post, I'll get rid of the other one.
Nov 18, 2006 -
Re: Elf Son
It's my story Lycan, not yours. Besides, if you want to hear the story unravel a bit, you're going to have to wait. Besides, I am going to work on ...
Nov 15, 2006 -
Re: Elf Son
p.s. I am not lazy, I am busy with other things. Like advanced math courses and book club. Don't just call me lazy because I don't post all of my ...
Nov 15, 2006 -
Re: Elf Son
Lycan, listen. You are being pretty impatient. Now, I will answer your questions. 1.) If you would look at my blog, you might realize that this is not a book ...
Nov 15, 2006 -
Re: Elf Son
:P
Nov 12, 2006
