lilchoma

I think that some individual wording could be improved upon. For instance, "adultered with corruption and infidelities" is a tad redundant, not to mention a mouthful. Plus, I don't think ...

I actually really enjoyed the first paragraph. I thought it was fantastic that by the end, I understood who was who and what was going on, even though it was ...

Yes, the grammar was on purpose, don't worry. I originally started writing it in nice correct English, but it was just way too proper in contrast with the whole idea ...

well actually, there is no artwork in this poem, nor museums. "Portraits of Alone" is an abstract term for all of the things that this guy sees everyday, and all ...

1. The Outsiders - S.E. Hinton 2. Peace Like a River - Leif Enger 3. The Catcher in the Rye - J.D. Salinger 4. That Was Then, This Is Now ...

The worst book(s) ever read by me - Narnia series. I finished all 7 off them in 2 days -.-` and i had hard time following the action and the ...

Okay I'm sorry, I had to comment again. The Series of Unfortunate Events is absolutely hilarious and I love Lemony Snicket to death. He's brilliant, I tell you.

haha this is true, I suppose I was not very descriptive. I'm not really sure how to explain it. I suppose you have to be interested in certain types of ...

im a bit in the dark here, wth is shrive?

conrad and kylan, I generally don't handle criticism very well, but I would like you to know that I'm rather thankful for the critiques you both gave me. I especially ...

like the vocabulary, very poetic. don't know what the heck this poem is telling me. atmosphere of this poem makes me uncomfortable.

hey music, thanks for being so cool about me spitting my beliefs out at everyone, im glad you're able to take it easily, even if you disagree. okay so more ...

thank you guys so much for your feedback :) and in terms of the rhyme scheme, it was meant to be AA BB CC DD EE...etc. but i didn't like ...

well thank you for your feedback :) (i wish this thing would let me do a sideways smile like i want it. i dont like the yellow people) and im ...

first of all, i would like to thank you both for your comments, and let you know that any feedback is always very much appreciated. next, i suppose i owe ...