lemonayyde

Thank you so much for the review! I will add punctuation to make it easier to read :)

Thank you!

Thank you so much for the critique! I'll go over the story with your comments and see how I can improve :)

Thank you for the critique! I'm so glad you enjoyed it! I did purposely omit a lot of things, just in case I wanted to continue this and I could ...

Thank you so much for the critique! I'm so glad you liked it :) I will go over it with your comments to see how I can improve

Thank you so much for the review! I'll take a look at what you said and go through the poem to see how I can improve :)

That's exactly what it was meant to do! And don't worry, even though I do identify as pan, I didn't find what you said offensive :) Thank you so much ...

Wow. I must say, this is my favorite chapter so far. I knew Hades would be an important part of the story due to Persephone's name, but it's already trying ...

Thank you so much for the critique! I fixed what you pointed out :)

I have nothing to point out for this chapter, but I wanted to comment nonetheless to tell you that I loved it! :)

Glad to help! I'm going to be reading the other part as soon as I can, I have some writing I need to finish up myself :)

I'm so glad that you like it! Perhaps I will develop it into a longer story!

Thank you so much for the critique! Now that you point those errors out I totally see what you mean- being your own proofreader is a dangerous thing. You read ...

Well, thank you for doing your first review on my silly little poem! I'm glad you enjoyed it, and welcome to YWS :)

I totally understand what you mean with the sentences you pointed out! I have contemplated changing them many times but could never tell if I should, so I will make ...