ldbonita

Hey there, here's a review for you! :) So, the first paragraph is quite nice. It makes the reader curious about what the speaker just saw and so pulls the ...

Hi there, here's another review for you! :) "A grin, a simple smile of joy" - I find these clauses to be contradictory. A grin suggests a more sinister feel ...

Well-written, I liked it :) If you wanted the ending to be more open-ended maybe you could have ended it at the part where she gets all deep about her ...

I quite enjoyed this, but there is a lot of editing you should do so that it be even better! :) The first sentence is my main problem here. Don't ...