ladydark

Thank you.. I wrote it ages back, but still it amuses me, and amuses others.

hehe, thanks. Not that great a writer. Left YWS for a while, didn't have things to post. But I guess I'm back again. I'll even try to edit stuff, but.. ...

Thank you. You were correct. It is fixed. Hopefully it is better now. After I wrote this, I created a second story to this, but not sure if to post ...

There is no more. This is the end... Heh, so glad this is only first draft. My teach read it over and said it was good, for now.. I'll change ...

heh, the little paragraphs are supposed to be italics, but i cant do it on YWS. I never said she was tied up for a while, only him, and I ...

Fixed alot, hope its better..

aye. I posted it once, but that was the icky version. This is the new and improved but not quite there version. The icky version.. -shudder-

the kid who got hit with the bat... don't know? The kids who beat him up a second time were the kid who got hit with the bat's brother and ...

eh... could you space between all the dialogues? it's so hard to read when its mushed together... it hurts the eyes, seemed good so far, then it kinda got like ...

fixed it... alot... hope its better :P

aye, but it kinda was in my own words ;) I can try again though

what would be a better sentence then

Lady Dark opened her eyes slowly and yawns quietly, finding herself alone she curled up under the blanket. She tried to fall back asleep but the morning light peeped through ...

honestly, I was scared of teh title at first... took me a while to read.. but lordy that was funny! Very well written, and highly entertaining! Good job ari, v. ...

My Star Oh my amazing and beautiful star, With soft emerald eyes, and bright auburn hair. Oh how I gaze upon you from afar, Out of all the beauties, you ...