kukukt007

Firstly I'll just go through the typos. :D pouting an screaming. When I ran and jump and play with them for with it comes no promise of comfort no comfort ...

Tasty little promises coated in sugar: hypnotizing, delicious, delectable, addictive Heh, I know what you mean. I didn't realize gluttony was such a sin. This part stood out to me ...

I agree about the execution, however the idea is nice. I could picture this stanza here, but thought that it could flow a bit better. Maybe check through your grammar ...

I sniffed in the evening cold, almost gagging on the bitter smoke. I hoped it was the wood-smoke I smelt, fearing pinewood was not the source of that pungent stench. ...

Very interesting. I like how you described the situation at hand, giving us a good background. “How serious?” That was my father, voice like a rough-worn garment, but with underlying ...

Pain clouds every inch of my brain tears fears lies through the years flow through my veins.Its a shame that i remain the same half sane all the songs that ...