kudzugenius

I like it. One question: What is the rhythym you are using? I can quite figure out the beat. Not really a comment as much as it is a question ...

By the way guys, call me Jacob. :D

Well, I was going to post another poem ,nut people wanted a better version of "The Two of Us". I am still testing some new ways of punctuating to add ...

Sorry, I thought I had made at least three reviews. Thanks for the critique. I really couldn't figure out a real scheme. I just let it flow.

I'm crying.........still crying..........ok I'm done. Beautiful.

Thank you for the positive criticism. I plan to write more on the topic. Hopefully by the end I will have made the story as clear as possible without revealing ...

Sorry to :smt064 . Got to say one last thing. I didn't mean for this to rhyme at first. This is the exact chronological order to me being turned down ...

Thanks for the comments guys. I am technically not new, but this is my first post. I will definitely try to add more but, I am a haiku and short ...

Awesome, but you said "I know he can't me." I don't know ifnthis is just how they should speak or if you meant to say have or anything else. Truly ...

I don't know how, but you are doing even better than before. Where do you get all the inspiration.

Pretty good, but work a little harder on developing a character description.