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Thank you for the critique!!!

Thank you for the critique!!!

Some of the questions you asked, I answered in the post above yours. I understand the whole limo thing is unrealistic, so I will have to change that. Your question ...

I had a word limit when I was doing this prompt so I couldn't really expand on details. I guess I understand your point about the limo guy. But Matilda ...

I put in the changes you suggested. Thanks, chocoholic. Glad you like it better. If you could get me specifics of how to improve ch1, I would appreciate it.

Thanks for catching the typo chocoholic. I don't understand what you mean by I didn't show any emotion. I showed plenty. Thanks 1dering at stars, I'm glad you liked it.

Well Allison finds out eventually. Once again, I will try to work on the dialogue. Thanks so much for taking the time to read it. I know the jewel/legend thing ...

Okay, I'll try to work on the dialogue. Thanks for the critique! Just so you guys know, I'm hearing impaired, so it's more difficult for me to write realistic dialogue.

Thank you for the critique. I had posted this on another site and gotten similar comments about the dialogue. I will put in the changes I made there, and hopefully ...

Thanks jonny. But the fate of the galaxy IS at stake. You'll have to read more and find out why.

Thanks hummingbird. But it will be a while before I post any more of Safe Haven. Sorry :(

It was funny! I'm not sure what else to say.

First of all, nobody wants to critique five chapters at a time. Please only post one chapter or one half of a chapter at a time. Thank you.

"Elena... Hmm? Huh? Wake up... Uh, no thanks. Not interested. I kinda like all this quiet. I mean it. Get up right now, little lady. ... Mom? Mom, is that ...

Sometimes I get stories or plot events from my dreams. Most of the time, my dreams are weird, so I have to "unweirdify" it to make a story. Followers of ...