krazywriter

Very nice, Iron! Loved it!

Thanks! I'll be sure to work on my descriptions.

Yeah, you should probably try to read the story in order. You have some great ideas. Thanks for the help.

Thanks. Appreciate your suggestions.

1. I use the word the character said. Characters do not use perfect grammar. 2. Tell Riley he's immature, not me. 3. Just thought this chapter wasn't going anywhere fast ...

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I personally like "Mightier Still." It holds a powerful message. Love the quote that goes with it.

I strongly recommend reading the chapters in order. It makes lots more sense that way. Riley especially. Turkey - use context clues to figure out what number it is, then ...

No problem. It wasn't really all that many errors compared to some I've seen, though. It takes practice. You'll get it.

Good one.

Remind me again. Why are we doing this?

Ice cream! That would be a surprise... Okay, it's probably not the best time of year for that. Maybe hot chocolate would be better. Does she like stuffed animals? Does ...

What does this friend enjoy? Does she like certain foods? Games? Movies? Cards can be fun. You can either buy one or design one yourself. My personal opinion is the ...

Thanks! Great ideas. I'll work on those. This piece is actually intended to be a third-person limited serial. I'll admit I have trouble sometimes focusing on what one person is ...

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