kittykat99

Hey, interesting story here! Just a few things I picked up on. At the very beginning you say she 'happily found herself enjoying a fun Saturday', but if she is ...

Hey! So this is really interesting but just one little thing. There was some unnecessary punctuation at times throughout, such us, "My Birth giver (I refuse to call her mom ...

This is very very interesting and incredibly well written! I just have one very nit-picky thing, which is this. The voice inside Clara's head is the voice which speaks throughout ...

I love this a lot actually. It's simple but it's effective, and it's not so simple as to become childish. The only thing I would say is that I would ...

Truly wonderful but just...there's too many words. You clearly have an extremely large vocabulary but take it easy. "...the one single strand of parental name-calling that was intentionally authorized

This has some great potential, but there are a few grammatical errors I would like to point out, and questions I would like to raise. My first point is this: ...