kittykat

uh...ya.. I can't really find the words to describe how bored I was with this piece of work. I'm really dissapointed actually. :( you put, "Perhaps I good carry it ...

You probably know this but I'm a terrible critique. Sort of durring the middle I was confused because there were talking about brother and sister thing and I couldn't figure ...

I'm not suprised that I'm the first to read this. You had one grammatical error, you put "that" instead of "that was." Anyway, it was superlative and I can't wait ...

I'm not a very good at critiques, but here I go. I wish you could tell us the names of the boy and his grandfather. The fact that the grandfather ...

I loved the song! But I think you might have had an error in your grammer. You put "pint" and I think you ment to put "point." Still, if this ...

I disagree with Suzanne, I like the ellipses actually. The poem is short, yet it gets to the point. Well at least to me it does. This is how I ...

I cannot figure out what time period this is in. But I did like it very much! I'm sorry that I'm not a very good critique. There was a couple ...

I think you could have used his name instead of "he" every once and a while. What about the other people in his family? Discriptions about his house would be ...