kevin25a

Ok so loved the story looking forward to the next chapters. Hopefully I picked a time to read this right between you publish one. I didn't see any problems with ...

Ok so like the last chapter I found a similar problem here. “My birth name is James. Sounds too formal for me, so I started going by Jay in middle ...

Oh this was really good. I will be reading the next chapter right after too. Benefits of entering when stories ate far, less waiting time. :) So anyway on with ...

Wow um, not sure where to begin. I suppose I should say I haven't read the other parts, but I defiantly intend to now. It might just be that this ...

Since its still here, and a story I have followed completely I figured I might as well give it a review to help my blue team, so here goes. Loved ...

It was a really good story. But I have a nitpick towards a major flaw I noticed. Her mother stormed out of the tent after they were already off the ...

Ok so I will start with this, I loved the story. I have a couple nitpicks though, first being that other than serial killers, nobody has used red rooms for ...

Ok so Dan is in a coma? Just wanted to be sure I understand that. And was Melinda an illusion? Another thing that was confusing me at times was the ...

I liked it, but like joy said before me her speech is difficult to understand. I had to read cook's parts like four times just to understand. Making it a ...

Absolutely loved it. I'm looking forward to your next chapters if you're planning to make any. Like the comment before me I understand struggling with commas, I also noticed a ...

It was a really good story overall. But I think putting supernatural in the genre at least for this chapter would be a good idea. Fantasy can work with three ...

It's a very good story. Not sure as to just how old they are, especially with the last two sentences leading to believe Thomas and her are not children but ...

Loved this story. Was really good, like the comment before mine, you did just the right amount of describing, not to much or too little. Something I always fail at. ...

This was really good, I think the title is perfect in fact. It suits your main character and story. I would like to nitpick a bit at the lack of ...

Ok wtf! First problem I have is the title, should be "The kidnapping" if anything because he is taken and obviously liam neason isn't gonna help him escape. Seriously though, ...