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Re: She's such a Drama Queen Chapter 1
Hey there! Ooo, I like it. XD I love the dialogue, although It's kind of weird. You described her in the first paragraph as a really shy girl. It seemed ...
Jul 19, 2010 -
Re: the elementals (title curtosy of rocksmith)
Hey there! I love the way you started your story. It wasn't dragging. The way you started it captured my attention at once. :] Seraphina= a 14 year old stubborn ...
Jul 17, 2010 -
Re: I'll Never Understand(edited)
WOW. Nice story. Almost made me cry. Haha. Kidding. But, it really IS good. The concept was great - how things were hard to understand (yeah, things like that) “That ...
Jul 16, 2010 -
Re: The Living Night (PART 1)
Love the concept. =] However, just like what lily said, changing from 1st to 3rd person could confuse the readers. I know I'm not that good too, but I think ...
Jul 16, 2010 -
Re: Ever feel like me?
wow. I feel your pain. I really like it. XD The way you wrote it was really good. It seems like you're telling us your story without the intention of ...
Jul 16, 2010