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This is very good. It held me from the very beginning up to the last word. They've already pointed out all the mistakes, and even with them this was a ...

first off let me start by saying that i don't usually read stories with themes similar to your story, so my criticism might be biased. over-all i think the story ...

hi.well first of all i thought your concept was pretty intruiging. but i think i wanted to see more background on this boy. overall it was a good piece, and ...

wow.i had to read every paragraph twice.or maybe thats just me. though strangely i took a liking to this A dragon of New York flew into Jerome's mouth. Passed out ...

WOW.this was really, really good. if you were aiming for sending shivers down whoever reads this and have them waking up in the night looking for large, glossy eyes then ...

this is really cool, and it intrigued me from beginning to start. although the time when the perspectives changed from seth to aronn kind of confused me. i was kinda ...

that was rather amusing. pretty good too, although it often feels like a news report, but i think that was what you were aiming for. great creativity shown here, but ...

though this is good, it might've been better if you hadn't given everything away. you should've left the readers to guess at what you were hinting at. He found it ...

this IS really cool, even with the spelling mistakes and redundant words. it creates a vivid image in the reader's mind, like a sort of mini-movie playing itself out. the ...

this was nice, although i would have liked to know about the whole plot of the story. the words "super germ bug" seemed out of place to me. i dunno ...

it ends with a cliffhanger, and i kinda dig that. you need to describe their surroundings more, create a more vivid picture in the reader's head of where they are, ...