joshuapaul

Hello, I'm going to be harsh because harsh is honest, and that's how we learn. This is pretty good, I seldom read through an entire piece on YWS in one ...

Hi there, I love to review intro's so here we go. The sun was low in the sky, casting a gentle, tranquil glow over the world and creating the elongated ...

Hey there, I want to critique this but I don't know where to begin. It's fine as is, every time I found something to criticize I realized that it was ...

If this is a satirical bite at how over opinionated we all are, and how we inadvertently force culture down the throat of anyone who stands to contradict our dearly ...

My you have been busy Mike. How many more short stories are going to come from the catacombs? Are you writing any new stuff at the mo? Ah doesn't matter ...

Hey Priceless, Here for a critique as per your request. Okay, this is my first time writing any romance. Please be brutally honest Brutally honest? Really? No sugar coating? Okay. ...

Don't get me wrong, there is a place for poetry in story telling, but sometimes it can make the text so convoluted and messy that it is difficult to read. ...

Hi there, Ikion’s muscles bunched beneath his sleek black pelt, anger fueling his frenzied journey through the dark redwood forest. Good start. The redwood description seems forced in there and ...

Brilliant story Mike. Very American Pyscho of you. Something about white collar murder tales always reeks of Patrick Bateman, this is still fairly original though, and the dialogue with his ...

Hi JP here, One thing first. Although there are no strict policies about posting, you should really have an idea of whether this contributes to a novel or whether it ...

First let me begin by saying work such as this should be must be rated. I lost count of how many four letter words made me double take. F-Bombs and ...

This seems decent and deserves a decent review. I will do my best. 1 Rhys “Shh, it’s okay, baby,” I cooed as I petted her hair. The girl in front ...

Hmm this is pretty good. I adore the beginning; I read it half a dozen times. I couldn't find any glaring issues with GPS and the story, despite its brevity ...

This is good. I think grammatically its almost perfect, but don't take my word for it I'm not one for nitpicking. I guess for me the only issue with it ...

[center] The Flash It sent a chill down his spine. cliché He tightened the heavy coat around him how? I mean how did he tighten it? This falls a little ...