jonny911

Thanks for the help! I'm almost finished editing. Check out the Companion story, Cipher!

Huh? Is this straight from the storyboard? There's not much to crit, and if it is straight from the storyboard, it's not really your work, right?

I'll review this later today ;-)

Yay, that was quick. First of all, BIRD is supposed to be in caps Second, YAY Finally, all you people ROCK!

Sorry, it's too long. Maybe divide it into 3 parts? It's like 11 pages in 12 point font, which is way too long for me to read in one sitting. ...

I;m should be I'm Other than that, your story is still very awesome. I'm starting to like your humor more and more, too. The fight scene is fine, too. Good ...

Good job! You really built up the plotline and the drama. Not really much to say, it was good and well-written. Can't wait to read more!

Way improved from the old version. It really grabs my attention. Can't wait to read more!

I thought it was good, but it was kind of too short to say anything specific, you know? I'd like to read the story after this to figure out what ...

Good flow, and I felt it was really powerful. "Halloween Horror with one stroke of light" seems a little off-topic for me. Overall, I really wouldn't change much (poetry isn't ...

I liked it a lot! The best part was the imagery you gave: I really felt like I was inside your dream! And it also had a great story for ...

you turned something boring into something psychological: but that doesn't make it not boring. I din't really like the humor, either.

Pretty good. It seems a little stale to me though. Nothing really stands out about this story. Overall, it's good, but more of the same.

Just a note: a lot of the parts in this chapter are sort of meant to be misunderstood, especially where they are and who they are. It's kind of hard ...

Did you double post this story? I reviewed it yesterday. By the way, you should only post one piece of writing a day. It's just polite to not flood the ...