jonathon

i thought that this was a great poem that showed how much you really enjoy chocolate in all of your foods. there are a few things that i think might ...

it has some good info but there are a few things i think you should change. it is really well written but i got vary confused in the middle and ...

so Jacob i think that over all it is a great story but there a few things that i think you should change the first is that the first paragraph ...

I really like your story but there are a few changes that it think you should make. I think when you talk about them running away should show not tell ...