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Re: Children of the Pyramid: Chapter 1; Shujaa (Edited)
OK, so this is probably going to be a long reply. There is a prologue, but I feel that after your review I need to go back through my story ...
Feb 20, 2017 -
Re: Still Stone - one.
No problem! Some people I have reviewed for in the past got a little upset about my reviewing style, so I started putting a warning first. (Self-deprecating humor helps a ...
Feb 19, 2017 -
Re: The Bright Side: Excerpt
Have it your way
Feb 17, 2017 -
Re: The Bright Side: Excerpt
Miranda rights are stated before every arrest. That is a requirement.
Feb 17, 2017 -
Re: Storytelling, Suffering, and God: A writers perspective
Hey! Thanks for commenting. As for the statement, I can't say it is exactly what I believe. I was more trying to show the arguments made by atheists and skeptics ...
Feb 16, 2017 -
Re: Children of the Pyramid: Chapter 3 Part 1: Cold Blood, Steel Fire
Thanks Wizard You are very right about the viewpoint issue. I do need to clean that up. I will say that the first part is a little tricky. Shujaa is ...
Feb 16, 2017 -
Re: Maria Prologue Part 1
It's all good. Trust me, as an author, I completely understand. Sometimes as reviewers, it is hard to see stuff about a character because we only do one chapter at ...
Feb 16, 2017 -
Re: Storytelling, Suffering, and God: A writers perspective
Jimss here, Thanks for your review cub. Ok confession time, I completely agree with you from a Christian perspective. The original sin stuff is completely in line with Christian beliefs. ...
Feb 16, 2017 -
Re: Storytelling, Suffering, and God: A writers perspective
Jimss here Hey, em thanks for reviewing my work. I am a little religious yes, but I find my true calling trying to bring atheists around to at least considering ...
Feb 16, 2017 -
Re: Children of the Pyramid: Chapter 2 Part 2: A City of Faux Gold
Thank you for your review. Please, though, feel free to rip my work apart if you want to. I'm a masochist when it comes to criticism. :) Thanks, jimss
Feb 15, 2017 -
Re: Richard & Rebecca: Chapter Two -Spatial Irises-
Ok, I understand about the time thing. Makes sense to me as that's the way I originally read it. Jesus jokes are my favorite You are right, I can recognize ...
Feb 15, 2017 -
Re: Ascension: Phyrza Prologue (The Myriad book 1)
And GOD, I know what you mean about villains. It's like we can "see" exactly what they are doing, but can't describe it. My advice; don't try to make their ...
Feb 15, 2017 -
Re: Ascension: Phyrza Prologue (The Myriad book 1)
In regards to 4 Foreshadowing is good, but using "worlds" in that setting is something that the reader will likely just skip over as a modifier and pay no real ...
Feb 15, 2017 -
Re: Ascension: Phyrza Prologue (The Myriad book 1)
For 2, I see what you mean now, but I think it read like it is Phyrza is looking at two people because that paragraph is written in third person ...
Feb 15, 2017 -
Re: Richard & Rebecca: Chapter One -The Frozen Sun-
Cool. I'll get right on it.
Feb 15, 2017