jasmine12

I just wanted to say first off that the first paragraph is a bit long. Split it up because you are talking about a few different things. Also, Sunny Ville, ...

You probably posted this a long time ago, but I'll do a quick one over for you anyway. ha! ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ For me, everything looked like a Winter Wonderland. Through my ...

okay. Uhm, i noticed a few small things here. I prefer black for the way I feel or white for my ghost in my dream. Wouldnt it be White for ...

hello! I am super excited to read this. It's so different from a lot of the things I've been reading and writitng, so it's good. “Beginner fighters get ready now. ...

I have nothing bad to say about this. Just my favorite quotes. I don't say anything. All I do is cry until I can't cry anymore. It's deep. I love ...

Uhm, Merry, you stopped. This is the last part. WHAT'S WRONG WITH YOU? The public (aka me) wants to know more! Seriously rooting for James. I think that you are ...

I agree with the person above me. Things do seem a bit rushed. BUT! It's an easy fix. Blend in with what you've already got, just some of Sophia's thoughts. ...

I think there should have been more conversations between Sophia and the lord guy. I think the dance ended too soon and nothing was said. Also, James, yeah, totally rooting ...

Wow, uhm....can't say much about this one. Only that, Helena and Sophia say each others names a lot. Like ever sentence they say it. I haven't done any research about ...

Uhm, this James guy, what does he look like? SHOW ME not tell me, haha. It's okay I tend to do that too and get fustrated as I do. If ...

LOVE IT! The only thing that bothered me is her dress. Depending on the time, she would have a skirt and like a pettie coat and all this other crappy ...

Whoa! This is really good. Very touching/moving, whatever it's called. You did an excelent job with the visual, I could picture it. Walking father farther, not father. little nit pick. ...

But then, Susannah wasn’t really a normal person by anyone’s instead of starting with But. try Then again. yea? I continued reading all the way through in an unwavering. I'm ...

Hello. I am really excited to see where you take this story. I've loved it since I first read it and want to read more. I couldn't find any mistakes ...

Hello there! Looks really good. Who was I kidding? What was the point of going to school? What was the point, when everyone despised me and I didn't have a ...