jDawn

Hey! I thought this was really nice, and beautiful. All i can suggest is to watch out for run-on sentences. Don't get carried away with commas and stuff. It becomes ...

Wow, I wanna cry. Maybe not so much cause of the story but because of your friend and her sister. they'll be in my prayers. Really cool story too, Teardrop. ...

This rocks my socks off! I just have one thing to say, it starts off saying "Here's a story, of a pair of Uglies..." and then it goes into the ...

Okay, first of all, I suggest titling this like so: Novel Title Here Chapter One or Novel Title Here Prologue or Novel Title Here Exerpt. Also, if you space this ...

Hi! Jessica here! Okay, first of all, as you said this is very short. I suggest going threw and adding lenth to this. It needs depth and feelings from both ...

Hi! : D Here to review. First of all, I started crying when I read this. So far, Dakota's story is really sad and unfortunate. It makes me think of ...

Hi, Jessica here. Sorry it took me a while to get to review this :smt003 Grammar/Spelling I didn't find much, maybe one of two minors that I think my fellow ...

Hi! Jessica here for my review! First of all, I think everybody covered most of the nitpicks. : ) I think this is actually very interesting. You use a lot ...

Hey! Jessica here for a review! The hail hurled everything as far as I could see. This sounds odd to me, try wording it a bit differently, though only a ...

Hey! I'm here for my review, as requested! I think my fellow reviewers have already covered everything, grammar wise, so I hope I don't repeat anything else. Characters I think ...

Hey! It's Jessica here at your request. First of all, I must say this blew me away, and I'm not just saying that. It's written really detailed and your writings ...

Hey Skins, I'm here for my review. Although I think everybody above me already covered everything I see, grammar wise. Lucky me : ) No, just kidding. First of all, ...

Hi! I'm Jessica, and I'll be second to review "Fog In The Garden" First of all, I agree with Lily that this is wild. It's all too fast, and remember ...

Hi Libby! I'm here to review the third chapter of Closing The Door On My Past. : D I'll start with nitpicks. She stood up. Just to be safe, I ...

Hey Libby! I just wanted to tell you that I love this and I'm so sorry! Something I'd use to describe this wonderful poem is beauty with an edge. But ...