inkwell

Please keep comments considerate! :) I don't quite like this. You're using Christian imagery to evoke an erotic nature except... there is nothing Christian about this. Which makes it really ...

Thanks, I think agree with you on the most part. This poem was written too hastily I think.

Thanks retro! I won't change a thing.

Hey inkwell, For every word another is snuffed. Just to say I thought this line felt great to read. The sonic similarity of "another" and "snuffed" worked really well together. ...

Thanks and forgive me, most of my poems have a signature stamp of confusion that I never intend.

Hey, inkwell! I love your voice in this story--it's kind of wry, kind of dry. Not a romance novel voice by any other name, so I'm excited to read it. ...

Wow, thanks for sharing that poem, it was truly beautiful and inspiring. Considering the context I think it's an excellent poem. I'm willing to bet everyone who heard it really ...

Rhyme scheme is actually a device used to ENHANCE poetry and can be far more complex than the elementary way you presented it, most people have this misunderstood. In regards ...

Don't read other people's posts before your criticism, kingolions, it gives you tunnel-vision! :P (More depth in my PM) :)

I could have, and I thought about that. I intentionally wanted to make it sort of abrupt, as though the narrator paused or hesitated. I think I can get away ...

I don't know if you've read my PM yet Snoink, but one thing I just want to say that I did not mention was that part of what I DO ...

Clever and fun, you managed to animate even the words. I laughed the whole way through.

Hello there There was a lot going on in my head as I read this. I even held my throat a couple of times. Good job on this one. I ...

:) This a brilliant and snappy portrayle of suicide, which most people always go on to describe their rubbish lives and how they are sad about doing it, but the ...

I like it. It's different. A quick poem about suicide written perfectly... and sort of in a happy way. Well, not really happy but it doesn't make you sad. Just ...