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Hi, Brownbomd! Storm's here to do a review, so let's jump right into this. You begin with a very typical first sentence. I'm not the biggest fan of sentences like ...

Hi Passenger! Storm's here to do a review. So let's jump right into it. I loved your opening sentence. This may be a second chapter, but I really like the ...

Hi, felistia! Storm's here to do a review! I'll start with your beginning line. Vivid blades of honey gold streaked through the forest canopy, the dappled light waving over the ...

Hi, ScarlettFire! Storm's here to do a review. Let's jump right into it! I don't really have a general statement to begin this review, which is weird, because I usually ...

Hi, Tsunami! Storm's here to do a review. Let's jump right into it! The first thing I noticed were the similar names. Silvia and Silverblade. When two characters have similar ...

Hi, thecatonthemoon! Storm's here to do a review. So let's jump right into it. So you started out with a prologue thing. Prologues should usually be avoided unless absolutely necessary. ...

Hi, ZeldaIsShiek! Storm's here to do a review. You open with a bland line typical of an essay written for school. I understand that you probably were told to write ...

Hi, Starhunter! Storm's here to do a review! I really liked this. It was fun and lighthearted. It was pretty great. However, I did find a few issues with this. ...

Hi, soundofmind. I'm here to attempt a decent poetry review. (sorry if it's not great) First and foremost, I love your title. It feels like a part of the poem, ...

Hi, Tigeraye! Storm's here to do a review. I suppose I can just jump right into it. I thought that this was quite good. You used a ton of description, ...

Hey Pumpkinhead! Storm's here to do a review. I suppose I'll jump right into it. I really liked the concept of this. I think you used dialogue well to say ...

Hey, thanataphobic, Storm's here for a review. I enjoyed the content you have here. It's very insightful and well done. I especially enjoy the way you describe love. Despite the ...

Storm's here for a review. So let's jump right into it! I really enjoyed reading this. There wasn't much in way of plot, but it was meant to be character ...

You had a lot of large paragraphs. Large paragraphs can be daunting for readers and are sometimes hard to read. Breaking these up greatly helps the readability of your stories ...

The first thing I noticed while reading this was your starting sentence. Your starting sentence is supposed to be your hook. It needs to pull your readers into the story. ...