imapoemperson

It was good. :wink: i only found a few errors. The smells would swirl, swirl together you repeat swirl here and it sounds weird. But sometimes I wouldn’t get up ...

in the beginning what are all of the stars for they seem out of place? Overall i liked it;i didn't find any grammatical errors at all. It was a little ...

hey i liked it! For everyone else that read it and liked it peanutgallery007 are writing a book together, and here is my characters perspective of the event.

I like it, it was short and to the point. You might want to consider fluffing it up a bit because it seems as if you had more to say, ...

for me the poem has plenty of imagery, and almost every poem has a simile\metaphor in it, so i would leave it as it is. For a title you might ...

This was the first piece of writing that i read on this website, and i think that it what made me decide to make an account. For that i thank ...

I liked the poem a lot, but you might want to consider switching the last two stanzas with eachother. Or would that be less concluding? I do not know, but ...