Not sure. I know what you are saying...
Lets examine this;
As long as I am with you forever,
then anything is fine with me.
I am a pattern freak. In all the other stanzas, there are two short, but meaning ful lines. I believe, with the proper wording, that this stanza can be made into two stanzas, or mad a bit longer at least. I came up with a little something, you may want to consider changing it to something like it;
If you stay
forever
Anything
is fine
with me
I understand that it is still not all two lines, but it makes it a bit longer. It's just an idea. Lets see what else you've got in store for us!
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