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Thank you! I have made some of the improvements you suggested :)

Well then pass the message along to him. I wish him good luck :)

My God, if this is not the most profound piece I have ever read in my life... So much meaning. jk

Thanks for the the review :) Made an edit to hopefully dissolve confusion.

And somehow, it's still a better love story than twilight.

Although I liked the rhythm and shape of the poem, the 'nice guys finish last' is a little bit cliche. If you could have spoke about your individual experience more, ...

Thank you so for your feedback. I edited my work over again. :)

Your description was great, and I loved the way that you hinted at being elderly. It was interesting, and I loved the more open ending. However, the writing was a ...