iceberg
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You are very imaginative, as this is an interesting concept. There are still a few things you could improve upon, though. You want your reader to be hooked into your ...
Jul 12, 2016
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Wow, this was really great. You did a great job of keeping a voice for the little girl separate from the rest of the story. I would recommend describing a ...
Jul 12, 2016
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A lot of poems are about trying to 'win' an argument, and so something like this is always really refreshing. You spoke about pain and regret in a way that ...
Jul 11, 2016
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Your description was great, and I loved the way that you hinted at being elderly. It was interesting, and I loved the more open ending. However, the writing was a ...
Jul 11, 2016
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