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Aww. How cute ^_^ There's no way for me to critique something like that... it's too cute for criticism. Haha. Keep writing.

Wow. This was creepy... I don't think I'll ever look at a potato the same way again o.O Good job on vocabulary usage n stuff though. Very nice.

Oo. I liked it a lot. I especially liked the repeated verse, as it was powerful in its simplicity. However, my favorite part was the final verse. Cause it was... ...

Oooh... Perverted much? hehe. Yes. But it was... furry and cute. ^.^ Quippie like.

That... wasn't what that was supposed to mean... but I'll take it. >_

Ehh I don't exactly get what's going on here. Maybe it's just me though... The Hey Baby has got to go though; it's already a No Doubt song. >.

Ahahahaha! Simply remarkable. That's all I have to say about that. :]

I like it! It reminded me of Jack's Mannequin... uh, a lot of people don't like them, so if you don't, it was meant to be a compliment, either way. ...

This was pretty good I thought. One thing confused me: by the fifth stanza, your rhyme scheme had suddenly changed. It's not bad I guess... it just took me by ...

Mm... that was excellent. Really original and interesting. I especially love the ending. Great work. --Quippie

Oo, I liked it. It's kind of cliche in spots, but overall, I really liked it; plus, it's got humungo potential for sweet song-age. I'd listen to it.

Pretty good for a first attempt. I liked this part a lot: My fear, my anger. My fault. I do agree that it wasn't all that exciting or special, though, ...

Uhh... I don't get it. What was it about and why was it so short?

I'm pretty amazed, seeing as things rarely make me physically shudder when I'm reading them. And I didn't even notice the lack of capitalization (don't worry about that though, it's ...

Hmm... The lion thing was kind of strange, in my opinion. Also, the repetition of "he's so gorgeous" annoyed me a bit, but what's worse is the cliche of the ...