Who you are

by Aiva

Published October 7, 2007

I've been in a really happy mood lately, so I wrote this song. I don't really think there'd be ANYONE who would ever sing this song, excluding myself, but whatever. I kind of like it. :)

Who You Are


Rain falls down in long-drawn sighs,
Life sings a song, and time flies by,
Days go on,
And nights draw long,
Plain seems right, and different seems wrong

(Chorus)
Just be who you are,
Yourself can't really be that far,
Take my hand,
You'll see the world through other's eyes

Spread you wings,
And fly away,
The lightning plays,
And clouds all sing

(Chorus)
Just be who you are,
Yourself can't really be that far,
Take my hand,
You'll see the world through other's eyes

(Bridge)
Take a look around you,
And maybe you'll see,
This world is made of more,
Than just you or me

(Chorus)
Just be who you are,
Yourself can't really be that far,
Take my hand,
You'll see the world through other's eyes


Heh. Now that I look back and reread it, I sort of realize the main idea is really obscure... I think I'll rewrite it later and change some things around to make the rhythm and flow better, when I get more input to make it better. But for now, I'll leave it at that! :)

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IamArt
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IamArt commented Comment · Nov 23, 2007

the 1st verse and chorus seems alright; i like that message, but the rest is kind of confusing. I don't think it really says everything that you probably felt when you wrote it. i'd rework those pieces to fit the 1st verse and chorus.

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iQuippie
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iQuippie commented Comment · Nov 16, 2007

Oo, I liked it. It's kind of cliche in spots, but overall, I really liked it; plus, it's got humungo potential for sweet song-age. I'd listen to it.

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Aiva
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Aiva commented Comment · Oct 30, 2007

Yeah, exactly. It's a cliche, and it's been used millions of times :smt010

Hehe.

HurricaneEmily wrote a review Review · Oct 29, 2007

I like! When my dad gets those guitar lessons.. erm and guitar.. for me, I'll be able to try and play it. Pshh. I'll stick to accapella for now. I have the tune in my head.

The only thing I really would change (which you can't change or it ruins the whole song.. because there wouldn't be one..) is the whole idea. Be yourself. It's quite overused. I'm just waiting for someone to write about how it is easier to stay unknown and blend in. Hehe.

But I still think it's nice.

=D

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Aiva
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Aiva commented Comment · Oct 27, 2007

Yeah, I just wrote this, for no apparent reason. It was something where I locked myself up in my room, grabbed a notebook, and jotted down anything that came out of my head.

It was just a side project- something to get over writer's block, or something to clear my head, make everything easier.

Hehe. There probably won't be a second draft. And if there is, it won't be for a while. I'm focusing more on my stories now. Trying to get those down...

But thanks for the feedback!!

lyrical_sunshine wrote a review Review · Oct 22, 2007

Hmm... i think the second verse should have more to it. And maybe work on the chorus just a tad bit more. Some parts seem kind of random, such as "yourself can't really be that far." i don't know, maybe i'm just dumb and didn't get it. :D but definitely work on the second verse and it'll be really good!

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Blithley Nosh
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Blithley Nosh wrote a review Review · Oct 19, 2007

First, I sang it
Second, the second verse is really obscure. What does lightning and clouds have to do with being yourself? The first verse dwarfs the second, and it just sounds strange (to me). My opinion? Add to/revise the second verse and add one (or even two) more. Otherwise, it sounds good.

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She Writes
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She Writes commented Comment · Oct 9, 2007

I LOVE it. Beautiful. And I sang it. :D

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Aiva
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Aiva commented Comment · Oct 9, 2007

Sounds good! I'll post the revised one again.


........................It IS a bit short. I noticed that when I was posting, the second verse was REALLY tiny.

=D Thanks for the input!

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jonny911
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jonny911 commented Comment · Oct 8, 2007

Great song! Excellent intro. I'd put some work into making it longer ...maybe another verse and an outro?

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Someguy
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Someguy wrote a review Review · Oct 8, 2007

It is really good. I can make my own rythym in my head and that is good! :wink:

You should make more verse or let me put it this way.

Chorus)
Just be who you are,
Yourself can't really be that far,
Take my hand,
You'll see the world through other's eyes

Spread you wings,
And fly away,
The lightning plays,
And clouds all sing

(Chorus)
Just be who you are,
Yourself can't really be that far,
Take my hand,
You'll see the world through other's eyes


That was a sudden jump. Chotus, than one verse and then the chorus. Unless it is a slow song, you should add one more verse to make it AWESOME!

I really liked it. :)



Isn't it funny how day by day nothing changes but when you look back, everything's different?
— C.S. Lewis