hunterzero

When you changed the parts with the Elder Egret, you made it pretty obvious that the boy, Argöl, is the boy who is now at Inoq Aibb. Try to attempt ...

There are coupla' mistakes in your story, if you take the time to read it, I'm sure you will find them. If I have some more time, I'll post some ...

It's funny. I like it... However, the meter in your poem is slightly unbalanced, so try working on that.