hunterzero

He was going on a quest All the way to the Elven realm too. The capitalization (yeh... :? ) is off. Also, it could potentially be grammatically incorrect. Hundreds of ...

They were extremely powerful, and nobody can resist them when they try to attack. Grammatically, it should be: They were extremely powerful, and nobody could resist them when they try ...

I enjoyed reading it. The beggining springs at me; so I liked it. A lot of Capital-ized Words makes It seem something Special is going on With those words. You ...

I loved it. I can't wait to read more of this story. I just thought that the different language seemed awkward (i agree with silverstar, esentially). Wait, writing a critic ...