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HAHA! I laughed so hard. If you hate twilight watch Alex Reads Twilight on YouTube. It's super funny. Jenn

Unexpected twist at the end I didnt expect and I liked that. jenn

This is really good and it shows human mistakes and a real humans life. I like this. You should expand it into a novel cause I know I would read ...

“ I dont think you want this to be in quotation markd. Large globs of melting chocolate ice cream dripped over my hand and I tried to lick it up ...

“ I dont think you want this to be in quotation markd. Large globs of melting chocolate ice cream dripped over my hand and I tried to lick it up ...

“ I dont think you want this to be in quotation markd. Large globs of melting chocolate ice cream dripped over my hand and I tried to lick it up ...

I really liked this and can't wait to read more! There were no vivid errors I saw but I wasn't reading carefully I kinda forgot you were wanting to be ...

This is good although to nitpick Hey. ” I say as I stash the bag. I'd use a comma instead. but thats me The comma after hey.

Chapter One My alarm went off, disturbing the silence that was surrounding me. I got up slowly, stretching every muscle in my body. I got dressed without a hesitation, having ...

God is this sad. But good and I felt a connection to the characters which made it so sad so kudos on that one :) -Jenn

I REALLY liked this it was romantic and made me wish I had a boyfriend like that

It was really good and looked like a real author wrote it...I was honored to read it and would be honored if you would read mine and edit it and ...

I REALLY liked this its WAY better than If We Were A Movie No critiques from me :)

I READ HER BOOK SPEAK AND FELL FOR HER WRITING. SPEAK WAS A GREAT BOOK AND I LOVED READING IT!!

i laughed so hard at this LOL!