haven235

Thanks for the review.

This is good. I like the simplicity, as well as the imagery and the use of allusions allowed me to picture a vivid image and get an impression on the ...

Your words are far more compelling; they have given me the drive to rework it...entirely!

I could see this being a writing activity for us to do. Also, I'm looking forward to what you'll put up.

I wouldn't ban you for posting something written in the perspective of a psychopath. It's kind of refreshing to read something like this once in a while. Keep it up. ...

It is a novel by the way. I used to do only one-shots, so I'm pretty much struggling.

I'm actually working on fixing the second half, due to Night's response below... I can't find the best way to make the the scenario of the plot I'm working on ...

Well written.

Oh. Then good work!