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Re: Survival (sneak peek)
Hey! I love the start of this! Incredible! Your diction is very intriguing. The use of colors in everyday things is very well written. Like her 'pale' lips or his ...
Jun 8, 2013 -
Re: operation imperial[ch-1]
I love this so much. Your vocabulary is superb and I adore the storyline. I do believe there is some room for improvement but not much, for it was so ...
Jun 8, 2013 -
Re: (Untitled) Chapter One
Hey! I know you said this was only a draft but good gracious! It's incredible already! And I'm sorry but I have to agree to disagree with Stella below me, ...
Jun 8, 2013 -
Re: Fantasy Land: A Griffins Trail.
Hi! This is a wonderful start, I do believe there is room for improvement though! I would recommend using other words than "I" and "got". Also, I saw some grammar ...
Jun 8, 2013